Essay Prompt - Describe a custom from your country that you would like
people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific
reasons and examples.
Nothing
occurs with nobody, since human is sociological being. Especially Koreans have
developed extraordinary strong relationship among neighbors, from the cradles
to the tombs. In our daily life, we eat together, and work together. We share
our happiness, and help relieve the pain when someone is under affliction. We
also feel sense of belonging. We call it “Collective Society”. I firmly assert
that collective society is what we should hand over to next generation, and
also, what I would like foreigners to adopt the most.
First
of all, it helps make a strong relationship among members. Throughout millenniums,
Koreans have faced many wars. Such invasions are mostly derived by the geographically
position—peninsula. For both Japan and China, Korea is a way to conquer other
nations because Korean peninsula connects two countries. For instance, in
Korean’s Civil War, Korean peninsula was exploited for both sides as an
advanced base for counterpart. Such wars impoverished Koreans and everyone needs
to find their own way of surviving. An individual’s power is not enough to resist
to external force, and thus they help each other to overcome suffering. Koreans
solidified ourselves to fight against enemies, and form intricate bonds among
people which make us to overcome any situation. Just like families talking each
other with no hesitate, people converse with comfort.
Moreover, it provides the
way how to live with others. Since ancient times, several large families
gathered and lived in a village. With playing neighbors, children could learn
how to interact with others. Some opponents refutes that Collective Society
induces bullying because it forces every member to follow what others do. They
claim that bullying is prevalent in many Asian countries, which emphasizes
whole groups rather than individuals. However, Collective Society does not only
emphasize the whole; rather, it focuses on harmony among members. Most of
bullying occurs after individualism was spread. Nowadays, children grew up in a
small family, with not many siblings. Thus, they don’t know how to deal with
others. If we live as we did before, bullying will disappear naturally.
Last but not least,
Collective Society encourages people to run toward common goals. In other words,
it gives synergy effect. For example, Korea’s exponential growth in economy is
due to the synergy effect. After Civil War, nothing was left, and with a
President’s lead, every Koreans collaborated to achieve economic growth. They worked
day and night. They devoted their effort to Korea’s economic growth, and we
achieve the goal, faster than any other countries. A poor small country, which
desperately needs aids, is now giving assistance to other countries. In this
case, it has severe limits; a community’s development entirely lies on a
leader. However, as I mentioned before, everyone has equal right in Collective
Society, so minority’s opinions are also respected. Even though many people
think in a wrong way, there has been always someone who can see the righteous
thing.
To sum up, collective
society provides deeper relationship among members, provides guidelines for how
we live together, and finally, gives synergy effect in achieve common goals. Many
people often misunderstand Collective Society and Totalitarianism. They have
distinct features; Collective Society rather focuses on harmony between
members. It gives solutions for competitive society it influences many of
Korean’s characteristics such as their kinship and passion, Thus I firmly think
that it’s worth spreading.
